These couples were young adults from South Berwyn. The young man that intentionally started the argument, he looks to be in his early 20's. And his girlfriend looked around the same age as him. The man had a very loud and deep voice and that was the whole reason why this became a problem. The girlfriend had a soft voice and she only became loud when she was imposed to do so. She was also distraught through out the whole conversation because the man was being so ill-mannered about the fact she wasn't admitting she left the food.
Some people who were in the park noticed that it was starting to get worse. As the man screamed at the woman "I didn't leave the cake!!! I gave it to you and you left it on the table!! What are you talking about?" This became so loud that it started to wake people nearby because they were disturbed from there sleep. One man came up to the young adult and told him to stop screaming because the people around the park were being disrupted from there early walk. This made the young man realize that he was being childish. Also he became more thoughtful on what he was doing and he apologized to people near him. Also to his girlfriend because he was yelling at her for a silly reason. And they made their way back to the car. When they finally were on there way it was peaceful and quiet in the park.
To start with, instead of "Today two young adults were seen arguing this morning in the park at Proska. Around 4 to 6 in the morning." You should fix it to "Today, two young adults were seen arguing this morning at around 4 to 6 A.M. at Proska Park. you should fix the mistake in paragraph two about South Berwyn. Also fix the sentence 5 in paragraph two since it's missing a noun (person). In the first sentence of paragraph three, the word noticed is spelled incorrectly. Paragraph three also has incorrect use for there since it should be their. In the last sentence of paragraph 3, ion should on. Finally, put a picture of a park or just Proska Park itself to show readers the location of the story.
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